Is this a good start to a book? thanks!?

that is unbelievable. wow. everything is great. but if your brother is under 10 then maybe you should replace the words like parish to something that he might understand. if hes older than he should be able to understand it. i think that you should become a writer(: i tried to write a book once...didnt come out so good:( but i got published in a poem book for 9/11. but anyways back to u! i think that was unbelievably good...speechless. now im jealous!