Monday, November 7, 2011

Please critique my work, short excerpt on chapter 2... Adalie?

That's good. and u can really tell ur character's age she is sweet and innocent. I'd say keep going. though when is says "Father had borrowed" it should probably say her or Adalie's before it since ur going in 3rd person. Nice names by the way. Good luck:)

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